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She fears people like herself
He is what she is
Mirroring each other
Deeper they fall
She cannot trust him
He cannot trust her
Hearts already broken
Lives already shattered
She runs from it all
Between each other
So many walls
Help them cope
But neither are brave enough
to reach past their own walls
and tap on the other’s
She’s scared
Of what he may do
Of what she may do
If these walls may fall
Repressed with knowledge
Hidden with reason
If someone is going to break it down
Maybe it should be him
One of my old poems I found tucked away in my journal.
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travelgirlxx Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
Hi! Your poem has been featured as my fave of the week on my 1st ever Sunday Feature!
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Skull-Killer Featured By Owner May 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
interestig.
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MelikeBirsenAtes Featured By Owner May 12, 2011
Your work has been linked here: Marvin vs Melike
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MeaXMae Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2011
"If someone is going to break it down
Maybe it should be him"

these are my favorite lines out of the whole piece (sorry, "walls" is kind of a cliche to me). great way to end the poem, like "to be continued" or something =D
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toBea-or-not-toBea Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2011
I love the way you mirror the language for each persona
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2011   Writer
thanks so much :)
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toBea-or-not-toBea Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2011
No problem :)
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007Balel Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011  Student Writer
Very in depth feeling to this poem...
I like how you made the two characters so alike..
So close, yet so distant..
So alive, yet so bounded..
Great work :)

When I read it I got the feeling like this could be some sort of movie trailer (well a move trailer with a poetic form :P)
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OMyGzzz Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2011
OMGzzz this sounds way to familiar... :P
but i do really like it! you put it into words that i haven't been able to find myself. :)
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