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She fears people like herself
He is what she is
Mirroring each other
Deeper they fall
She cannot trust him
He cannot trust her
Hearts already broken
Lives already shattered
She runs from it all
Between each other
So many walls
Help them cope
But neither are brave enough
to reach past their own walls
and tap on the other’s
She’s scared
Of what he may do
Of what she may do
If these walls may fall
Repressed with knowledge
Hidden with reason
If someone is going to break it down
Maybe it should be him
One of my old poems I found tucked away in my journal.
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travelgirlxx Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
Hi! Your poem has been featured as my fave of the week on my 1st ever Sunday Feature!
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Skull-Killer Featured By Owner May 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
interestig.
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MelikeBirsenAtes Featured By Owner May 12, 2011
Your work has been linked here: Marvin vs Melike
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MeaXMae Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2011
"If someone is going to break it down
Maybe it should be him"

these are my favorite lines out of the whole piece (sorry, "walls" is kind of a cliche to me). great way to end the poem, like "to be continued" or something =D
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toBea-or-not-toBea Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2011
I love the way you mirror the language for each persona
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2011   Writer
thanks so much :)
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toBea-or-not-toBea Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2011
No problem :)
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007Balel Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011  Student Writer
Very in depth feeling to this poem...
I like how you made the two characters so alike..
So close, yet so distant..
So alive, yet so bounded..
Great work :)

When I read it I got the feeling like this could be some sort of movie trailer (well a move trailer with a poetic form :P)
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OMyGzzz Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2011
OMGzzz this sounds way to familiar... :P
but i do really like it! you put it into words that i haven't been able to find myself. :)
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2011   Writer
aww thanks :)
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OMyGzzz Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011
your welcome love :huggle:
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010   Writer
ok...
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acuar3la Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2009
wow, it's so amazing because that's what i am going through
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2009   Writer
Im glad you can relate to it, though its not the best place to be in, I know.
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AmbitiousEmbers Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2009   Writer
absolutely love the emotion involved, very well written :)
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2009   Writer
thank ya!
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AmbitiousEmbers Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2009   Writer
lol no problem :)
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Ink-Stained-Despair Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2009
Really good, emotive, conflicted...
Beautifully done.
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2009   Writer
thank you very much :heart:
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aquagirl7 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009   Writer
i love it, more because of the fact that i can really relate to it and i find that the poems i can actually relate to are always the best poems in my perspective...those and ones that really make you think, you know? anywho well done!
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009   Writer
I'm the same way, with prose and poetry. The more I relate, the more I like it.
I think thats one of the best comments, that the reader can relate :) Thank you
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aquagirl7 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009   Writer
again no problem ^^ you really do have a gift!
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johnbjuice Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2008
Both of the people in the piece are highly Machiavellian - they're manipulative and distrusting, and assuming that everyone else is the same way.
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2008   Writer
I wouldn't say manipulative...
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johnbjuice Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2008
They sound manipulative, or at least cautious of others being manipulative.

Lines -
"She fears people like herself / He is what she is...She cannot trust him / He cannot trust her...So many walls / Help them cope / But neither are brave enough / to reach past their own walls / and tap on the other’s"

Definitely not upfront about things...

I dunno, that was how I read it. :D
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2008   Writer
just because they aren't spilling their entire life story to each other doesn't mean they are manipulative.

I suppose my idea of manipulation is slightly more
hostile
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johnbjuice Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2008
you can manipulate people without being hostile. manipulation in my mind is just trying to do what is best for yourself instead of being honest.

but whatever! you're the poet, so do whatever feels right to you!
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johnbjuice Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2008
you know, upon rereading this, I totally want to change the title to "Machiavelli"

:)
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2008   Writer
I feel at a disadvantage. I have not read Machiavelli. How are they related?
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johnbjuice Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2008
simple. good. these go together well.
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2008   Writer
thanks :heart:
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drae17 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2008
Wow... I love it.
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008   Writer
thanks :D
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Aluthien Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2008  Student Photographer
Beautiful! :clap:
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2008   Writer
thank you SOO much!!! :D
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Aluthien Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2008  Student Photographer
You're very welcome :hug:
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zespair Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
once again 100% pure DROOLAGE!!! :D love it!!
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2008   Writer
haha
why thank you. :)
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zespair Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
no problamo! ;)
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Venaeli Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2008
This is inspiring.
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2008   Writer
thank you so much.
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Venaeli Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2008
I had to go write what you inspired. I was sure to give credit. Thank you.
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2008   Writer
I can't wait to read it.
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blondeandbrilliant Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2008
Very Erin.
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2008   Writer
as always.

do you expect something other than myself.
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blondeandbrilliant Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2008
I merely meant this was even more Erin than usual.
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2008   Writer
haha, I suppose. maybe.
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anbellofe Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2008
Very intense but in a good way =D
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